Hey y'all,
I'm just going to leave a link to my semester project, b/c the formatting and the fonts didn't carry over to Blogger. Also, please open it in Google Docs, not as a Word document because it messes up the caption formatting and that sparks an unreasonable amount of fury in me.
This is a copy of the one I shared with Mr. Mitchell so you can't see him making snarky comments about my writing ability. ☺
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1bi4rvZxK2eJ_DV4soxsM7OAHbM2ZlaYb/view?usp=sharing
You can just leave comments on this post if you feel like giving me feedback.
Stay safe.
Tyson
I'm just going to leave a link to my semester project, b/c the formatting and the fonts didn't carry over to Blogger. Also, please open it in Google Docs, not as a Word document because it messes up the caption formatting and that sparks an unreasonable amount of fury in me.
This is a copy of the one I shared with Mr. Mitchell so you can't see him making snarky comments about my writing ability. ☺
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1bi4rvZxK2eJ_DV4soxsM7OAHbM2ZlaYb/view?usp=sharing
You can just leave comments on this post if you feel like giving me feedback.
Stay safe.
Tyson
I really really enjoyed reading this story - you're a really eloquent writer and the story just really flows well. And also it was so well researched and included lots of historical details, and I think that really adds to the realistic element of the story and the richness of it. Also, this was a part of history which we learn about a lot, but never in such an intimate way and in particular from the perspective of women, which is really refreshing. You can tell that you thought about it a lot and it's a really awesome story!
ReplyDeleteThis is phenomenal -- the characters are captivating, the writing style gorgeous, the story intriguing. I got completely immersed in the world and while I don't know a lot about this moment in history or the people, the story felt very authentic and real and accurate to me. I absolutely adore everything about this.
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing. You combined history and fiction seamlessly, and gave so much depth to your characters and story. I was captivated the whole time while I was reading this. I love that you chose to write about a figure that is often defined by something that happened to her. I think your story defined her as an independent person.
ReplyDeleteTyson this is absolutely amazing. I felt as if I were walking in the streets of Naples with Palmira and experiencing the betrayals with her. I'm glad you decided to write not about the trial but life after the trial. Somehow a woman is remembered for what was done to her and not what she has accomplished. Artemisia is a trailblazing painter for women artists and I'm glad you also wrote about the prejudice Artemisia had to face while doing the work she loves.
ReplyDeleteI loved this! Your writing is absolutely beautiful. I loved the way you told Palmira and Artemisia's story, and I especially love that you chose their story. You depict a painfully accurate and all too common tale of women in history, quite literally erasing Artemisia's work from the world. And I love Palmira's perspective of having to choose a side, which she most likely did in real life as well (though not so personally). One thing I might add: perhaps a glossary. There were definitely some terms and places that confused me for the first few pages simply because I didn't do the research you did. Overall, though, I really enjoyed your story!
ReplyDeleteOnce again, this story turned out incredible. You put so much effort into researching it and making sure everything you wrote was "authentic." It reminded me of Love in the Time of Cholera (even though that book takes place in spain) in how the writing allowed us to picture the setting and people and "feel" like we were there in that place and time. You took this story, the people in it, very seriously, which resulted in a piece of writing that brought light to their real story and let the audience really see them. I actually appreciate that you never tried to be funny or make light of events because it worked out so well and resulted in a story that people can deeply explore and contemplate without anything to detract from the fact that it is such an explorative and commendable piece of writing and I don't really know how to say what I'm trying to say. Great job
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